A couple men lived in a cave
They spent their whole life there
They were chained as such they were a slave
and their chance of escaping was rare
All they knew was what they saw
Their brains were mostly empty
The one who was freed was in awe
Because of what he would see
The shadows were just a vision
They were made to deceive
Not one could make a smart decision
The men were made to believe
The free man saw beyond the cave
He escaped and was no longer a slave
Nice sonnet! It shows your understanding of the allegory well. The only thing I caught was the rhyme between empty and see. I thought it was a little awkward, but it's understandable from a certain view. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ubi on that one rhyming couplet that seemed a little off.. But apart from that I think its a good simple summary sonnet that states the main points! I think you did a good job(:
ReplyDeleteRemember that the sonnet also has to be written in iambic pentameter, the pattern of 10 syllables. Great demonstration of understanding and interesting perspective in the third verse. I didn't think of it that way.
ReplyDeleteGreat job laura!! i enjoyed reading this. yes it may not be a sonnet its still creative): please ocmment on mine :)http://danig14.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment! But I am not sure how to leave a comment on your sonnet? Where do I click to comment?
DeleteI agree with Ubi about the rhyming part but other than that it was a good representations of the allegory of the cave! Remember to use iambic pantameter (although I'm not quite sure if that is a requirement to be a sonnet...)
ReplyDeleteNice Laura. I like the last two lines, a nice way to end it. :) I agree with the empty and see awkwardness, but hey, not a huge complaint. Still a good sonnet!
ReplyDeleteI like how you compare the chained men to slaves. It makes you think of how they must feel repressed and possibly angry or maybe they accept their fate. It is interesting because slaves in America eventually united to free themselves. Perhaps that will happen with slaves of ignorance.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on getting the rhyming down. Was a little confusing on the second stanza.
ReplyDeletePlease comment on mine
http://pkimrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/allegory-of-caves-sonnet.html
Great sonnet! I liked it overall especially the last lines!
ReplyDeleteGood work, i enjoyed reading your sonnet!
ReplyDeleteNice sonnet. I enjoyed it.
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Good job laura!:) simple and straight to the point.
ReplyDeleteNice job on the sonnet. Simple but great.
ReplyDeleteI like it. The point of the allegory is shown well in your sonnet :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I especially enjoyed the last two lines. :D
ReplyDeleteNice job! I loved the last two lines(:
ReplyDeleteGood job Laura, the only thing that caught me off guard was the rhyming scheme between see and empty. Besides that good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Laura! Your sonnet summarizes the allegory really well while also adding in the theme and perceived meaning. Good work! :)
ReplyDeleteI really liked it you did a good job of making the allegory simple and understanable good job :)
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